banana boy

Posted by Lewis M in 100wc, Learning | Tagged | 2 Comments

one day I woke up ,got dressed an then I started to walk to school . once I got to school I walked inside and started to read my book about super heroes , I always wished to become a super hero and every day I would pretend to play super heroes with my friends . after school I started to walk to back home by myself in the corner of my eye I saw something as it flew towards me I couldn’t see what it was . as it hit me I fell to the ground and fell asleep for half an hour . when I woke up I looked at my hands they had turned yellow . i quickly walked home with my hood up so nobody could see me . when i got home i ran upstairs into the bathroom and looked at myself in the mirror … I got sooo scared when i figured out I looked like a banana !!! all of a sudden i heard a very loud bang i looked out my window and i saw someone trying to break into my house . i felt something in my pocket i pulled them out and they where bananas . i squeezed them and bananas shot the robber and knocked him out .

2 responses to “banana boy”

  1. Philip Waller says:

    Very interesting ideas. I like the way you set the scene with your dreams and tied that into the ending.

  2. Mrs Addleton says:

    Lewis, this is a fantastic tale with a clever mix of serious and funny. The second half was definitely better – much faster paced, more descriptive and exciting. Remember I should be capital. What a clever use of the prompt – I bet it’s a unique one!
    3 house points
    Mrs Addleton

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