Fin the foot

Posted by Lewis B in 100wc | Tagged | 2 Comments

Fin was a foot from the moon Foot that orbits the planet Body. Fin had a red snake called Hi who lived in a clock before the Toe War . Every day  Fin would cycle to  a shop called Sweet, pure Pie the pie shop. One day when fin cycled rainbows came out and coloured Foot up. It was so colourful people from Body and Hand came. Suddenly a strange space ship came down and someone came out and said to Fin ” hi I am Henry the Hand and you need to come with me,” So they blasted of to Earth.

 

 

 

2 responses to “Fin the foot”

  1. Mrs Dibben says:

    Hello Lewis,

    I really enjoyed reading this blog, it was so much easier to read now you are paying attention to your spelling and punctuation. I love the idea of a rainbow decorated foot.

  2. Mrs Addleton says:

    Hello Lewis,
    Goodness you published this blog quickly this week. I am so impressed that you have really taken on board some of the comments that you received in previous weeks about grammar and spelling, it makes it so much easier to read and therefore enjoy. It’s picky, but now remember to insert a comma after fronted adverbials or around extra information e.g. One day, when Fin cycled, rainbows……. I love the quirky idea about the snake living in a clock and how you have tried to combine last weeks prompt with the new one.
    A very enjoyable read,
    3 house points
    Mrs Addleton

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