In the magical forest there was a tortoise. He was a very wired tortoise. The tortoise had a name called Fred. Unfortunately, he had no friends at school but what he did have was a …. a …. yellow book along with his very own pencil. Then after a while, he eventually made one friend called Bob he was all right ” I GES ” Fred silently said. There in the same class WHITE RODOS and the same group in Maths and English.
On the next they road there skateboards to school and Fred and Bob went to sharpen there pencils to the point, then they snapped of the end on purpose just so they can talk to each other . Bob and Fred were being very cheeky as usual bob naughtier than Fred. At the end of the day they were tired of being shouted at so Fred thought to wright an apology’s letter and to say” that he was sorry and told the teachers why he was being naughty and to forgive him for what he did.
Bob went over to Fred’s that evening to finish off there homework after they did there non understanding work which most people find at school. So they decided to start playing video games.
CHAPTER 2 FORTNITE
Fortnite the first video they thought of.
thank you I just have a question if you want to finish your story how do you do it ?
Hello Willow,
Huge CONGRATULATIONS on publishing your first blog to the world. Bob and Fred remind me of quite a few children I know and I wonder if you’ve based them on anyone in particular. Their antics with the snapped pencil lead is a surprisingly cunning ploy and one I’ll have to pay attention to in future when I see children at the pencil sharpening station.
If you read it through carefully, I think you’ll spot where the following words should have been used: their instead of there; weird instead of wired and they’re instead of there. You made a great effort to use a variety of punctuation, especially inverted commas. If you like writing direct speech then I can help you with this next week.
It is very exciting to see you think ahead to a second chapter in your story and I’ll look forward to the next instalment.
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Mrs Addleton