shops

Posted by Kade in 100wc, Learning | Tagged | 2 Comments

On a random Saturday I was laying in bed when my mum yelled up we need some milk so I ran up the shop and then when I got to the shop it  was ran down and out of business so I went inside to check it out. When I got inside there was a glowing suit case so I went over and opened it up and it sucked  me in so I had to find a way to escape from inside. I looked all around until I found the the key when I got the key I  released myself and decided to never to go any were I am not aloud to go again.

 

2 responses to “shops”

  1. Mrs P (Team 100WC) says:

    Hi Kade
    I enjoyed your 100WC this week. Remember to use punctuation in your writing. It makes it easier for the reader to understand the story. I am glad you managed to get out of that suitcase!
    Mrs P (Team 100WC)
    Wellington, New Zealand

  2. Mrs Addleton says:

    WOW Kade, it was brilliant to see you back at blogging this week. I loved the idea of being sucked into a suitcase – I wonder what you found inside? You’ve used some direct speech in your blog so be brave and try using inverted commas next time. Check your sentences don’t get too long and the spelling ‘aloud’ means out loud and ‘allowed’ is when you are allowed to do something.
    Hope to see you again.
    3 house points
    Mrs Addleton

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