the tiger land

Posted by Poppy in 100wc | Tagged | 2 Comments

A  pretty gorilla was running around the zoo like crazy.   Yellow bricks were in the gorilla house and he started to eat them and a tooth fell  out and is hurting so much he ran a way and we can;t find him and we din trying to find him and we cant  find him and we can not find a find him and we cant be around

 

 

2 responses to “the tiger land”

  1. Elsje Maassen says:

    Good use of adjectives to add detail to the story. To help your reader understand your story better, full stops are helpful.

  2. Mrs Addleton says:

    Congratulations on publishing your first blog Poppy. I really liked the way you used the prompt words this week. The first few lines of your blog used full stops and capital letters to make clear sentences. Perhaps you could improve the end by braking it up into sentences as well. I’m looking forward to reading more blogs from you,
    2 house points
    Mrs Addleton

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