The story of a Chap called Charlie pt2

Posted by CharlieG in 100wc | 2 Comments

He put his hands up and reached for the register then lights flash in front of his eyes he then remembers its purge night. He then reaches under the counter for the shot gun and BANG the man dropped blood spatter everywhere he shook he never purged before. He ran back home and 5told his mum and they locked down metal covered the windows and doors now they had to sit tight and wait.

2 responses to “The story of a Chap called Charlie pt2”

  1. Mrs Addleton says:

    I’ve got a feeling this is going to be an action packed tale Charlie. You’ve used words and language which brilliantly create vivid pictures of what is going on in your blog and the word purge is quite chilling. Check your tenses; you started in past tense (using words like put and reached) so you should maintain this throughout so the reader doesn’t get confused.
    Hope Charlie and his mum are safe now.
    Mrs Addleton

  2. Mrs Dibben says:

    Mmm. Sounds like this is a boy who needs to be kept safe.

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