THE LAST DRAGON

Posted by Jethro in Learning | 1 Comment

“It was a lovely day the sun was out the sky’s were blue it was perfect until I found this egg”. The egg was bright gold I found the egg in the wood’s my best friend’s Daniel and Lucas were with me I went to my house and locked it in my tray that say’s DO NOT OPEN I kept it warm and discussed what we should do with it.”

One response to “THE LAST DRAGON”

  1. Mrs Addleton says:

    Hi Jethro,
    I like some of the vocabulary you have used in your blog, such as the word ‘discussed’ and the way you have used adjectives to describe things. This makes it so much more interesting to read. Check your blog for sentences – did you use any capital letters and full stops? I think adding sentences will make it much easier to read. I am really worried about what will happen to that egg in your tray – will it hatch, or even worse explode?
    Don’t forget to leave comments on other bloggers’ blogs.
    2HP
    Mrs Addleton

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