At school I had a school trip to go on today and we took a coach. The colour of the coach was mauve. The teacher gave us some rules and if we didn’t follow them we would have to go back and sit in the coach. The place we went to looked like a jungle, and we saw an Alligator. Me, Elisia,lily H and Lauren tried to clime a tree and it was tricky. We got sent back to the coach and Elisia started cry because she missed her mum. Then we all got sent back to school.
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Congratulations on completing and publishing your first blog in such a short time today. This sounded like a really exciting school trip and seeing as it’s not like you to break the rules I’m guessing you had to climb the tree to save yourselves from the alligator? Some adjectives and adverbs would make this more exciting. Can’t wait to read more blogs from you this year,
Two house points
Mrs Addleton