computer monkey

Posted by Lily H in 100wc | 6 Comments

a long time ago lived a monkey who was very good with computers but he got a bit angry he typed one wrong word but Mrs monkey came in and said why don’t you try¬† the 100 word challenge it will help you get your words correct and you will be much happier and we could take the kids out instead of you being on your computer it is very boring because you start talking to yourself¬† i want to get out it is BORING now i need to cook dinner for the kids Im making curry for us but the kids are having chips







6 responses to “computer monkey”

  1. Kate Wilson says:

    Hi Lily. Congratulations on your first blog. I thought what you wrote was very good and I could definitely picture the monkey family in my head. I hope the kids got some bananas with their chips.

  2. William says:

    Hello I am William and I am 9. I like your blog about the mad monkey.
    Will you do more in 2018?

  3. Andrew Paterson says:

    Hi Lily,
    I thought your first blog was well thought through and that you created an interesting story for your readers. I was also impressed that you managed to incorporate 100 WC in your text, a very clever touch!. Do break up your text with sentences as this will make your work easier to read. Additionally, remember there are lots of different punctuation marks to help you make your story more exciting.
    A really good effort , well done.

  4. Mrs Dibben says:

    Welcome to blogging and the 100 word challenge, which you have cleverly quoted in your blog.
    I completely empathise with poor Mrs Monkey, doing the chores when she and the children would rather be outside as a family. I love your description and completely understand her frustration as she listens to Monkey muttering to himself as he works.

    I look forward to your next blog.

  5. Mrs Venables says:

    Well done Lily on your first blog and fantastic that you have also managed to include the 100 word challenge. Mrs Monkey doesn’t seem very happy with Mr Monkey and his computer, much nicer going outside.
    To make your next blog even better Lily, remember to include capital letters and punctuation. I look forward to reading it.

  6. Mrs Addleton says:

    You’ve done it Lily, you’ve published your first blog! Well done. Poor Mrs Monkey, I do feel sorry for her having all the chores to do whilst Mr Monkey is on the computer. I wonder what he was trying to type? You really made me smile when you made reference to the 100wc and I think it would be a good idea for him to try it – the prompt certainly made us all smile this week didn’t it? Remember in your next blog to use capital letters to start your sentences and break up the text into sentences using some full stops.
    Can’t wait to read more blogs from you Lily,
    2 house points
    Mrs Addleton

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