One day at the fun fair one gloomy night there was a world of people. I went on one of the fun rides I was so dizeyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyy. I was nearly sick and fell on the ground and hit my head. I was starting to get blood everywhere and I stared crying so my pearents helped me get up from the dirty, smelly, disgusting , floor then we went to get some lovely delicious candy and cotton candy. It was so yummy I saved some for little baby cute sister who is so funny like a cheacky monkey climbing on a high tree and bushes .
Hello Alisha,
What a great first blog. I completely agree with Mrs Addleton’s comment.. I also love the fact you were saved some candy for your sister , who you describe so well. In fact your description throughout the text really draws I. The reader
I look forward to reading your next blog
Thank you for publishing.
A big well done Alesha, I have a feeling this might be your first published blog and what a brilliant blog it is too! I loved the way you sent the scene as a gloomy night which set me on edge straight away before it turned into even more of a nightmare! However, what a relief your parents were around and it all ended happily with cotton candy – perfect!
This was a real treat, thank you Alesha,
Mrs Addleton
3 house points.