The invading aeroplane

Posted by Osea in Learning | 2 Comments

Chapter one the invading aeroplane .      ‘[mummmm]’  the boy mumbled.  oh how are you?  well let me tell my name so my name is Danile Fish leg. ‘[honeyyy]’  we have to go  to the ariport  i  was misreble and shaking with fear as i took a breath  and went in the aeroplane… I was in the aeroplane sitting in my seat but suddenly the black mysterious door o pen  a dark creture peed out…                                                                                                                                                                                                                                                                                                                                                                                              next chapter coming up

2 responses to “The invading aeroplane”

  1. Mrs Addleton says:

    Hello Osea,
    You’ve got me gripped Osea! What can this dark creature be? I could really sense how nervous Daniel was about getting on the plane, especially the way you described him being miserable and shaking with fear. Make sure you check for full stops and capital letters, perhaps reading it out loud might help with this. Top tip: unlike word, the blog won’t autocorrect i with a capital I when you use it as a proper noun.
    I’m so glad you’re enjoying blogging,
    5 house points
    Mrs Addleton

  2. Evan says:

    Osea this is brilliant

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