it makes me feel sad because all this carbon dark side is letting out bad air for humans and animals and making people’s lung’s bad if they breath carbon dark side and animals why don’t people STOP using normal car’s and lower the price of electric car’ you need to stop did you now that every minute a truck load of plastic is in the water
Well done on your first blog Zac. It’s so encouraging to know that you and so many young children your age care for the environment and are aware of some of the problems that we face.
Don’t forget to work on your punctuation with someone – properly punctuated your blog would have been even more powerful. Well done though and I look forward to seeing your next (punctuated) blog.
Mr Leftwich
Greetings from Australia Zac. Congratulations on your response to this week’s challenge. Your text has a very strong message, but without punctuation your readers have to work really hard to gain meaning from your writing. I suggest that you ask a friend to help you edit for punctuation before you publish.
Thank you for the thought-provoking post. It is important to remind everyone that some consequences are more than a big picture. Please try to remember to use capitalization to help your readers to grasp your message better.
Hello Zac,
It was so exciting to see your first blog! All the break times you have given up to publish this were worth it because now your writing has been shared with the world on http://www.100wc.net. I think you could improve your blog by checking for those all important sentences with full stops and capital letters. However, your message is very clear and I agree, our air would be much healthier to breathe if we had more electric cars and less carbon dioxide.
I can’t wait to read your next post,
5 house points,
Mrs Addleton