Hi, my name is Snape from Hogwarts school of with craft and wizardry. If your at Hogwarts currently you will get a list of things to do but I am really angry because when I wen to Hogwarts I loved dark arts but when I trained to become a teacher, they said I had to do potions because a teacher named professor knuckle head was signed to do it but one day I’ll teach him a lesson he’ll never forget. Ever since Lilly Potter died, it’s been really dull and I miss hugging her near the wicked willow.
anyway I got to go now
from Snape
Hi Luke, you know what I’m going to write – sentences! You make good use of commas and contractions but check this one: ‘you are’ contracts to ‘you’re’. Also, check common spellings like went before publishing – I know your spelling is fabulous so these are easily correcable errors for you. I love the way you write in the voice of the character.
You will run out of characters soon, although we haven’t had Hedwig’s entry yet!
2 house points
Mrs Addleton