One sunny day, Millie and Lilly went to the park, they had a little swing and slide, then it stated to rain and they went home. But on the way home they saw A FLOATING BIKE!!
It was yellow and had a bell and basket on it and for some reason it moved by it’s self. They were very confused and puzzled. One minute it was doing a hand stand (wheel stand) the other minute it was going on it’s back wheel in the middle of the ROAD!?
And that’s the craziest thing they ever saw in their life
The End
Very good Amy it is a weird but lovely story.
thank you
Hello Amy,
A bike doing handstands would certainly be a crazy sight to behold! I think you could improve your blog by avoiding the word ‘and’ quite so often and perhaps using some direct speech. I like the way you introduced the girls on an ordinary trip to the park before their day turned very very weird.
3 house points
Mrs Addleton
Thank you for the corrections also I will stop using the word ‘ and ‘
From Amy Green
p.s thanks for the house points.