Yellow bike

Posted by Alayla in 100wc, Learning | Tagged | 5 Comments

When it was my birthday on the 10th of January my mum got me a yellow bike . I loved it so my mum went with me into the forest and  I got a spray and coiled it with a snake and the snake bit me . I had to go to the hospital and I stayed in there for two days . So after that it was time for me to go  home I was so happy but my leg still hatted my mum got my yellow bike back so I can try to see if I can still ride it or not.

5 responses to “Yellow bike”

  1. Amy says:

    Hi Alayla very good but you shood probably use more commas and the word and.
    you also did exactly 100 words

    from Amy G ✔

  2. Mrs Addleton says:

    Alayla, this is your first blog for over a year and it’s brilliant. I love the story line about the snake. Check the past tense for hurt – you have used grumpy Ed which is a good mistake – it is actually the same as the present tense. For example: Last week I hurt my leg (past tense) and My leg is hurt (present tense).
    You got your blog to nearly exactly 100 words!
    3 house points
    Mrs Addleton

    • Alayla says:

      it was from ages a go but I really like how to talk about grunpy ed and how it is a good mistake thank you see you when we go back to school

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