The Yellow Bike….

Posted by Charlotte G in 100wc | Tagged | 1 Comment

One sunny day, a little girl named Tilly was at the park with her friend Matilda.They played on the swings and on the slide.They both live near to each other so they go to the park together after school every day.Matilda has brown hair a beautiful sense of humour and she is a wonderful friend.Matilda rode her bike to the park and she lost it on the way there. Tilly said wheres your bike but Matilda didn’t answer because Tilly gave that bike to her on her 6th birthday, and Matilda had crashed it and she was covered in mud. The bike meant everything to Matilda. Tilly asked her again, wheres your bike that i gave you?

Matilda was worried that Tilly would be mad at her but she had to tell her. When she did Tilly was mad at her so Matilda ran and ran until she got to the forest and looked for the bike so Tilly wouldn’t be mad anymore. She looked and looked and looked but she couldn’t find it. Matilda started to cry she fell to the muddy ground on her knees crying.”What do i do,I’ve lost my bike” said Matilda crying dreadfully. “what do i do?” Just at that moment Matilda saw a flash or a sparkle of bright yellow light, it could have been the sunlight or it could be……

 

……HER YELLOW BIKE!!!! Matilda rushed over to see what it was. Tilly however, was standing next to it Matilda didn’t know how but she was standing right there and Matilda thought she was still at the park. Tilly had got there when Matilda was crying she ran over and Tilly had found it and she had fixed it. Matilda was so so very very happy and so was Tilly, they both went back home had a play on the swings then ran straight to their houses and had their dinner ran back out and they both rode their bikes up and down the street and were happy friends again. [ YAY WOO! ]

 

The End.

 

 

 

One response to “The Yellow Bike….”

  1. Mrs Addleton says:

    Hello Charlotte,
    What an epic and emotional story this was. I liked the way you tried to describe the girls and how they were feeling. By the middle, I didn’t like Tilly because she seemed insensitive about Matilda loosing the bike, however by the end I was back on side because she had fixed it. It was a bit creepy how Tilly got there so fast though. Don’t forget your contractions – where is should be contracted to where’s. You made good use of inverted commas, well done.
    3 house points
    Mrs Addleton

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