…When I was a little kid, I used to make paper aeroplanes and I still do now. I had an obsession with paper aeroplanes and some of them didn’t even work but it was one special gold foil jet that I remember the most. My dad spent ages pressing the delicate and tight folds. We went to the forest to try it out but when I tried it just went to the ground. Then my dad added a little tweek to the tail fin and he handed it to me. I put my hand back drew the plane level to my ear and threw with force…
Hi Poppie
I love your real life 100WC (or at least it reads like a real life memory which is great!). The ending is very effective as it leaves the reader wondering what happened this time. Well done.
Mrs P (Team 100WC)
Wellington, New Zealand
Poppie, some nice detail in this. I like the idea that you might have never seen that special plane again and it would be a nice follow up to hear about its adventures! Watch the punctuation at the start and don’t forget commas so separate items in a list.
2 house points
Mrs Addleton