Cool Kids!

Posted by Becca in 100wc | Tagged | 1 Comment

One day there were some POPULAR pretty GIRLS BUT DUMB  in a Playground BUT one day, they discovered a POTION in this like kind of CAVE. then, they went into the cave  DRANK THE POTION   then they came smart again!

 

 

 

THE END hope you enjoyed it!

One response to “Cool Kids!”

  1. Mrs Addleton says:

    You’re first ever published piece of writing Becca – congratulations!
    Don’t forget that you need to reach nearly 100 words and use the prompt to get published on the 100wc website that people read all over the world.
    Be careful about using the word ‘like’ – did you really need it as well as ‘kind of’? Also, you have put ‘one day’ twice so your reader might get confused which day or days this all happened on – could you be more specific about when it happened?
    Wouldn’t it be wonderful to have a magical cave on our playground? I wonder what fantastic things might happen in it?
    1 house point
    Mrs Addleton

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