Don’t look around the corner!

Posted by Freya in 100wc, Learning | 1 Comment

There I was in the forbidden old cobwebbed place.I roamed around looking for what I might just do next…………..I found a Freddo but it was probably like a MILLION YEARS OLD so I decided to leave everything alone and just keep on exploring the place cautiously and then that’s when something caught my eye! I was so angry that I decided to look away and not be bothered about it.It was my BFF Charlotte and her 2 sisters Amy and Eleanor I was not impressed. I did tell them to wait outside the front door of the place but they must of got scared that something could of taken them so ventured their way to me.”Why are you 3 here I did tell you to wait outside this place!””We got scared sorry.”I knew it!

 

One response to “Don’t look around the corner!”

  1. Mrs Addleton says:

    WOW Freya, I am so impressed by your choice of vocabulary (such as cautiously and ventured) and different sentence starters. You set a spooky scene at the start which had me gripped on the edge of my seat. As we discussed, try to avoid using ‘like’ in your writing unless it is a modern informal piece such as your diary.
    3 HP
    Mrs Addleton

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