The great performance!

Posted by Amelia in 100wc, Learning | Tagged | 4 Comments

On the 5th of May there was a great performance live on tv. Were you able to see it? It was on at 5 o clock on itv . It was performed by a girl called Mollie . She was very talented .                                                                                                                                                                                                                                                                                 On the 8th of May there was an even better performance by a dance group . Were you able to see it? They were brilliant , excellent , outstanding . The best dance I have ever seen n my whole entire life!                                                                                                                                                                                                                                                                                           The performance by the choir was brilliant on the 10th of May. Were you able to see it ? The best choir group ever!

4 responses to “The great performance!”

  1. Clemence says:

    Hey Amelia! I love your story / poem??
    It’s awesome but I agree with Mrs Addleton , no offence!
    The repetition is great and I love that you added questions which really brings out your work! ♥♥

  2. Jess says:

    Well done emaila you deserved the house points well done

  3. Mrs Addleton says:

    Hello Ameila,
    Quite a punchy short blog Amelia helped by repetition and simple short sentences. Make sure you use upper case letters for abbreviations like TV and ITV.
    2 house points
    Mrs Addleton

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