This morning me and my friends Eden and Amelia were hanging out in the back garden playing on the trampoline it started getting cold so we went back inside for our breakfast and warmth.
After breakfast we went up to Eden’s Bedroom to play with her hamster Claudia and the piano,as we did so a I saw a strange shadow out the corner of my eye, “I saw a shadow,were you able to see it?”
“No” thy replied with a hint of curiosity in their voices.
We ran downstairs scared but curious ” I wonder what it was” mumbled Amelia curiously.
Hi Freya, I wonder what the shadow was? Perhaps Claudia had sneakily invited a friend for a sleepover and they were trying to escape unseen; was the shadow small and quickly moving along the floor? You have made great use of inverted commas and used some great replacements for ‘said’. Remember that we say ‘my friends and I’ rather than me and my friends.
It was lovely to see you in blogging this week, I hope you get a chance to do some more.
3 house points
Mrs Addleton