one day there was these pretty girls called Rebecca and Sophie and we are very pretty and we are very friendly and we are step sisters and we are very kind and nice and lovely people. and one day Rebecca and Sophie and it was nearly Rebecca’s birthday and she will be 9. her birthday is February the 18th.and she might get a bike or be BFF’s with me that i will be really happy if she will be my BFF. forever and i am going to Rebecca’s house tomorrow and today is Tuesday and i am going on Wednesday so i am going tomorrow. i’m so excited.
Hello Sophie,
I think this is the first blog you’ve ever published so a big congratulations for that! Your blog makes the friendship between the two girls sound very exciting.
You have written this over many playtimes in January and it can be hard to write a story that flows when you stop and start so much. Next time, make sure you find a friend to read it aloud to before pressing publish and check things like sentences, capital letters and full stops.
I hope the two friends had a great time together on Wednesday!
2 house points
Mrs Addleton