20 years ago their lived a boy called Dan , Dan lived in a huge house with his dad and he had a friend called Jack , Jack lived in a small house with his mom and dad so Dan thought that he wanted to go on an adventure!
So Dan went to get Jack.
“lets go an adventure!”
” okay!”
So Dan and jack went on an adventure so they went on an adventure so they had to go through forests fields villages and finally they had reached the legendary island yessssssss were hear the legendary island said Dan and jack the end
Hello Daniel,
I was just getting into this blog, when suddenly it was ‘the end’. Mmm, hopefully next time you you will write a more fully developed blog.
Hi Daniel, it’s a shame you ended your blog so abruptly because I would have liked to read more about the special island. Well done using punctuation associated with speech, however I think you could improve your blog by using some full stops in paragraph 1 and avoid using the word ‘so’ as frequently as you do.
2 house points
Mrs Addleton