Ethan the Eye👁

Posted by Lewis B in 100wc | 2 Comments

When Fin and Henry landed they were greeted by a 150 meter long red snake. “Is that my snake Hi?” asked Fin ” yes and he came with Ethan the Eye.” said Henry. “Where does Ethen come from?” asked Fin. “Before, the Toe War he lived on Eye one of the moon that obits Body but after the Toe War he cycled to Body and lived in the clock tower then he got kicked out and came to earth.” Then Hi tripped on Big Ben and drowned in the water. Suddenly, Ethan jumped of Hi but he got killed by the Army so Fin and Henry were sad they didn’t kill Ethan.

2 responses to “Ethan the Eye👁”

  1. Mrs Dibben says:

    Hello Lewis,

    This is a full on tale of twists and turns. I am glad you used capital letters so I could work out the characters names.
    The last sentence confused me, are they sad Ethan did not die? Or did the snake die?

  2. Mrs Addleton says:

    Hello Lewis,
    My goodness, I had to read this a few times to keep up with the twists and turns. It’s a shame that Hi died, I thought he sounded like a good snake. I’m sure I’ve seen snakes swim on David Attenboroughs documentaries so perhaps Hi could have escaped the Thames? You have really impressed me with how much attention you have paid to spelling and punctuation in this blog – you are really improving your writing!
    3 house points
    Mrs Addleton

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