a weird story

Posted by Callum J in 100wc | 2 Comments

a man wearing a red shirt cycled a red bike and wearing a top hat and when he got home he checked his clock and it was 12:59 and he freaked out ahhhhhhhh lunch but in the cupboard he had a tuna melt baguette but as soon as he opened the cupboard he saw a ……….. SNAKE!!!!!! and so he ran to his bike and cycled away from the snake but the snake was following  him but before he thought it was fake but it was not fake it was real so he savaged him to his death but he moved to quickly.

2 responses to “a weird story”

  1. Mrs Dibben says:

    Callum, this is a great first blog. You have added great detail to make the reader laugh. I love the idea of a red shirted cyclist in a top hat.
    I look forward to reading your next blog.

  2. Mrs Addleton says:

    Callum, it is wonderful to read your first ever blog – well done! This blog was a really fun read Callum, I love the detail about the top hat and laughed at the idea of the snake hiding in the cupboard – do snakes really eat tuna melt baguettes? I particularly liked the word ‘savaged’. I think you could improve your blog by reducing the number of times you use the word ‘and’ as well as ‘but’.
    I hope we get a chance to read many more blogs from you,
    3 house points
    Mrs Addleton

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