The secret hand part one.

Posted by Mya in 100wc | 7 Comments

Once upon a “STOP”  “Why”  “Because it is NOT a fairy tale”  “Then what is it”  “It is a BLOG”  “Wrong set sorry. Bye” “Finally they are gone. Let’s get on with the blog”.

One day there was a little girl at the age of four she was sleeping peacefully then all of a sudden she woke up but when she woke up she saw something looking at her from her closet. She was terrified. She ran out of her room and got her mum up and dragged her to the closet. She didn’t see anything so she went back to bed. The thing came back and kept coming back and then she went missing. Where did she go? find out next time on the secret hand.

7 responses to “The secret hand part one.”

  1. Kate Wilson says:

    I really like your first blog, Mya. Your first paragraph was fun to read and the second one intriguing.

  2. Jackie Cameron says:

    Hi Mya and welcome to the world of blogging. It will be exciting to check your world map and see where you get responses from.
    I wonder if you could have used fewer words in your first sentence …. a little four year old girl was sleeping peacefully …. suddenly woke (rather than ‘all of a sudden’) to see something looking at her from her closet.
    I do hope you have an idea of where you want this story to go in your next installment?
    Thanks for sharing,
    Jackie (Team 100WC)
    New Plymouth
    New Zealand

  3. Andrew Paterson says:

    A fascinating introduction to your Blog. I agree with Mrs Addleton that your piece would have benefited from the use of punctuation nevertheless, it was a very enjoyable read. Well done Mya.

  4. charlie says:

    that was ment to say you can only do 1 blog for the font because they will have to scroll through 1000s of pages to find part 1,2,3,4,5,6,7,8,9,10,11,12,13,14

  5. charlie says:

    Hey mya its

  6. James says:

    Hi Mya
    I hope you get time to make a second one as I am interested to find out what happened to the girl.

  7. Mrs Addleton says:

    Hello Mya, it is wonderful to see your first blog published – congratulations. Your opening was quite unusual and made me want to read on. I liked the way you made the girl sound likeable and then quickly upped the pace of the story to create tension. I think you could improve the blog by adding some punctuation to the first sentence in paragraph 2.
    Well done and I look forward to reading more from you.
    3 house points
    Mrs Addleton

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