Mr Jongys business

Posted by Charlie P in 100wc | Tagged | 3 Comments

Once open a time there lived a man his name was mr jongy he had a business place . He had a pet that was a monkey,he was mischief.

Mr Jongy had opened a new business.His pet monkey goes to work with him.the monkey’s name was John.One day he went to the office with his father. but he was very naughty because he drunk his dads coffee and he pushed the company’s computer.When they went home he got told off my his dad and was never aloud to the business again. “im so sorry dad I will never do some like that again”

3 responses to “Mr Jongys business”

  1. Mrs Dibben says:

    Welcome to the wonderful world of blogging Charlie.
    I liked reading your story but was unsure whether Mr Jongy ‘s son or the monkey caused the trouble at work.
    I look forward to reading your next blog.

  2. Mrs Addleton says:

    Hello Charlie,
    Finally you have published your first blog! The way you describe John makes him a very likable character despite his mischief making in the office. What will he do if he isn’t going to work? I dread to think waht he might get up to if he is left at home on his own all day! I know that you wrote this in less than 10 minutes during your playtime and were keen to publish but next time make sure you take a few minutes to check and edit your blog for simple errors and homophones like allowed/aloud.
    It will be lovely to read more blogs from you this year Charlie,
    Mrs Addleton
    2 house points.

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