There once was a sly monkey and his name was Jerald. Jerald was a fashion desighner who worked for his mother in IBN , the name of there company. He was a terrible desighner but still worked for the money . One day Jerald went one his computer and recived a message : JERDLD I’M SORRY BUT YOU ARE FIRED NEVER RETERN TO IBN AS YOU ARE BANNED ,LOTS OF LOVE MUM . Jerald lobbed his computer accross the room , it abliverating into millions of peices . he was so angry and took dinomite down to IBN and exploding it and never being seen again …
The Fired Fashionistia
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I am William and I am 9 years old. I like your blog but I would not wear any clothes made by a monkey so it is good that he got fired. I’m going to read your blogs next year.
From William
Hello Ella,
I love the alliteration in the title.
You have organised your wring clearly into well punctuated sentences making this easy to follow.
What was it I wonder that made his mum fire him? You describe Jerald as sly, was he fired because of this, or just because he was a terrible designer?
I look forward to reading your next blog.
Hello Ella,
Don’t worry about the formatting of your blog – I wonder if this happened because you did it on your phone which makes it harder to see on the small screen? I noticed that you took real care with your punctuation this time Ella which made this much easier to read and therefore enjoy. I was starting to feel a bit sorry for Gerald being stuck in a job he probably didn’t like but then I remembered that he was sly so changed my allegiance to his mum. I hope it was his own computer that he obliterated! Watch out for the homophones there/their – did you use the right one?
Another exciting read, well done.
2 house points
Mrs Addleton