It was a normal day , a Sunday , me and my friends were going to the zoo. When we were in the car driving down the hot , dusty road John spotted a dark , gloomy figure siting on the road. We pulled over were the man was sitting , when we opened the car door the dark man said come to my house , me and Finley haven’t hade visitors in years , please. so we walked up the road to the zoo the man showed us a crack in the wall he told us to go throw it. When we got out of the wall we were in a TIGER CAGE !!!!!!!!! The large , golden tiger walked round us until the tiger was blocking our escape and the chance of living!!!!!!!!!
the golden tiger
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An interesting and scary story in which we couldn’t be sure what would happen next. So we kept on reading to find out and such a dramatic and exciting ending. Well done.
Hi Lewi
I really like your blog you have done a fantastic job at your blog well done
Will
Hello Lewis,
A scary tale with a very sinister character. I was nervous when you and your friends decided to follow the dark man and immediately knew your decision would lead to trouble! A couple of spelling errors suggested you possibly relied on ‘spell check’ rather than your own spelling skills but all in all, a good read.
Wow, what a cool blog Lewis. You created a superb picture in my head. I’m beginning to think that the stranger was the tiger’s keeper who’d run out of tiger food!
Lewis, I was so excited to read your first ever blog and it didn’t dissapoint! You brought the story to life with great adjectives to describe the road, stranger and the tiger – I could really imagine the tiger encircling its victims. You used the prompt perfectly in context and brought the story to a good ending. Make sure you watch out for those sneaky homophones such as threw/through and where/were!
I can’t wait to see more blogs from you Lewis, well done.
Mrs Addleton
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Hello Lewis,
What a well crafted blog. You lulled me into a false sense of security with your opening sentence but then like the pleading gloomy figure In your tale did to you I was captivated.
I really hope you live to write again.