The day the tiger escaped from the zoo

Posted by Trinity C in 100wc | 7 Comments

Today was a CRAZY day out at the zoo. It all started when me and my bff Aimee arrived at the zoo.

”Mum? Can we go see the tigers now?” I asked. Mine and Aimee’s favourite animal is tigers.So we went up to see the tigers.

When we arrived, we noticed a man standing next to the tiger enclosure. ”Hi!” he said. His name was Norman. ”I’ve just fed the tigers! Love a good bit of meat they do!”  He seemed nice.

”Are they friendly?” Aimee asked.

”kinda. Just don’t get too close.” Norman replied.


Soon, I noticed a panel with loads of buttons on the side of the cage.I pointed this out to aimee.

7 responses to “The day the tiger escaped from the zoo”

  1. Brian says:

    You have written this piece really well. Good punctuation and conversations set out clearly so we can almost hear the people talking to each other. It’s exciting, so we now want to know what happened next.

  2. Joseph says:

    A really nice paragraph with a really amazing start but I think you could of ended it a bit better, or was it a cliff hanger.

  3. William says:

    To Trinity
    I am 9 nearly 10 and you did a very good story

  4. Andrew paterson says:

    I was really impressed when I began to read your piece. The opening sentences were so well constructed that I was immediately drawn to your story and couldn’t wait to read the outcome. Therefore, I was disappointed when your piece stopped abruptly. I do hope you will have the opportunity to finish it at some stage.
    The few sentences you posted suggest to me that you have a truly bright future as a writer. Do keep writing, people will want to read your work, well done Trinity.

  5. Mrs Addleton says:

    I hope you get a chance to finish this blog. You have made Norman sound really creepy that I get the feeling he had it in for the two girls. I hope they dont come to a sticky end!
    Mrs Addleton
    1 house point

  6. Kate says:

    Wow Trinity! Super blog! I love the subtle hints in your language – “he seemed nice”, “don’t get too close”. I hope you get to finish your blog. That panel with loads of buttons is just calling out to be used!

  7. Mrs Dibben says:

    Ooh Trinity, what a tantalising tale. I
    love the opening and cannot wait to read more.
    I love the way you write ‘ Love a good a bit on meat the do’ then say just don’t get to close! Really made me think ooh these girls ares could be in trouble.

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