Tiger Planet ): ): ): ): ):

Posted by Elijah H in 100wc | 9 Comments

In a land far away were no one knows about a planet called the tiger planet !!!

2 men from planet earth travels across the universe  but on the way there unexpectedly  a dreadful tiger follows them back home. The tiger at first was fine then the tiger tried to attacked them , but they tried to escape the rocket but the tiger was blocking our escape!!!

How was we able to escape?!

Just then a man was ate by the tiger ! ):

9 responses to “Tiger Planet ): ): ): ): ):”

  1. bleu says:

    I love your blog

  2. Brian says:

    Nice idea to have a story about a “Tiger” planet that we could travel to from Earth. Using the spaced paragraphs is good and sets out the story well. Makes it seem to have occurred over a longer period of time and in Space.
    Sad that a man got eaten by the tiger but did the other man get away? Very interesting.

  3. Elijah H says:

    thank you for your comment Mrs A.

  4. Joseph says:

    A really good paragraph but maybe next time you shouldn’t put the unhappy faces

  5. William says:

    To Elijah
    I am 9. Your blog is really good well done

  6. Andrew paterson says:

    Setting your story in space was a great idea, well done Elijah! Do remember that slight alteration to the spelling of a word can change the tense in your story which the reader will find confusing. I always try to avoid using words twice in a sentence because that too helps the flow of your story ( if you read your sentence that contains ‘but’ twice you will see what I mean.
    However, I enjoyed your story although sad to read one of the explorers was eaten by a tiger!

  7. Mrs Addleton says:

    Elijah, I really enjoyed reading your blog. I know you had lots of ideas for the tiger theme and it was unusual to see one set in space! It reminds me that there are constellations (groups) of starts that you can see in the sky at night which are shaped like animals and named after them. I know there is one called The Bear but I wonder if there is one called The Tiger which came to life to chase the earth men? Perhaps you could improve the flow of your blog by making sure it is all written in the same tense. Can’t wait to see what ideas you have for the next blog!
    Mrs Addleton
    2 house points

  8. Kate says:

    Hi Elijah. I like your blog with all its danger and adventure. I hope the tiger is full – at least for now…

  9. Mrs Dibben says:

    Hello Elijah,

    Great to read what is I think your first blog.
    I like the way you started with the planet being far away and unknown. The blog makes me think. Did the two earth men realise they were near planet Tiger? Did the tiger spot the rocket and somehow jump across to it? Mmm . Will planet earth be consumed by the tiger from space?

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