Batteries Planet is so cool! Sunny everyday, Honestly its paradise! Its very energetic there because they are batteries and batteries charge up quickly. The planet is kind of a white planet but is a shape of a sandwich. In every Olympics the last place competitor hurried so fast they nearly got on to the podium. Last year Ussain Sandwich came first and his reward was a white cup which was massive. One day they promised to name the planet after him. He felt a bit happy and a bit shocked.
Planet Batteries
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Well done Joseph. I love the way you’ve used the given words so seamlessly. Since everyone there is so energetic I bet everyone deserves a space on that podium. I hope they rename the planet Usain rather than sandwich though, as visitors might think it’s named after its shape rather than its hero.
Hello Joseph,
I love the way you use a series of short sharp sentences to quickly get the reader involved with your blog. Good to make reference to a hero we can all identify with to further engage your audience.
Clever story craft
Great effort to get all the prompt words into this piece Joseph.
This planet does sound cool. Would you like to visit?
I like your blog. Especially how you used all of the words in this weeks prompt like ” battery planet.
Instead of using the word “bit” twice you could use the word “slightly shocked”
I think yours is my favourite idea so far.
William
Joseph, what a jaunty tale that cleverly used all the words in this weeks prompt. I would love to hear more about Ussain Sandwich – what an interesting character he sounds. Describing the planet as being shaped like a sandwich was a unique idea. I can’t wait to see more blogs from you Joe.
Mrs Addleton
2 house points.