My Journey to the Beach

Posted by Joseph A in 100wc | 7 Comments

My Journey to the Beach, was it good? No! I’m sure. Although it was a nice sunny day, at 03.18 pm I had a confession to make, a big confession! I didn’t like huge deadly Monsters but… at that time I saw one “Leave me alone, I’m only a 8 year old!” I shouted but he was a type of a ghost called Bam – Bam,he was a black old beast who loved eating people like YOU! I luckily had my knife a SHARP one because I needed to cut my samwiges and guess what, I did it! BUT I didn’t like it…

7 responses to “My Journey to the Beach”

  1. Cliona Brennock says:

    Hi Joseph,
    We’ll done on your first blog entry. I hope there will be many more!
    It’s a good job that you brought sandwiches for your picnic!
    Ms Brennock
    Team 100 wc

  2. Joe says:

    Thank you guys so far, it was the best day of my life yesterday (when I did it ) Joe

  3. Joe says:

    Thank you Guys so far! I think it the best day of my life yesterday! (When I did it) Joe

  4. Kate Wilson says:

    Hi Joseph. I really liked your blog. Fantastic use of speech marks. Who would have thought that remembering a knife to cut your sandwiches would turn out to be such a fortunate thing! I’m going to add that to my list of picnic necessities! Well done

  5. Mrs Dibben says:

    I love way you get the reader to empathise with your situation.

  6. Mrs Addleton says:

    Brilliant blogging Joe, this was your first time publishing and, considering you only had 15 minutes, you did a fantastic job. You were so clever to give us clues about how you avoided being eaten by Bam but didn’t actually tell us. Your punctuation really made it easy to read. Remember the spelling of sandwiches – quite apt for a trip to a sandy beach!
    I hope you do lots more blogging Joe, I will be very excited to read your next one.
    Mrs Addleton
    2 house points

  7. Andrew Paterson says:

    Hi Joseph.
    I’m writing from South Carolina the USA. I was fascinated by your story which was imaginative and and well described. your piece was very easy to read and understand. Well done

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