Mysterious Mayhem

Posted by Oliver M in 100wc | 6 Comments

This man is as creepy as the darkest woods.  He always knows when people are coming.  He looks like a statue so he can leap out he has no face.  He has a creepy sign next to him and no one understands the language. We should be afraid of him because he is deadly because he gets out of stone mode and attacks people.  The last person who got surprised by him didn’t freak out they kept a cool head and faced the no-faced monster.  The man (who has super powers) turned invisible and ripped his hood off and the cloaked devil vaporised.

6 responses to “Mysterious Mayhem”

  1. Mrs Dibben says:

    An interesting first blog. I walked past some gargoyles today and the thought they might surreptitiously come to life, as did the statue in your story, made me very twitchy.
    Was very relieved your statue ended up vaporised.

  2. Well done Oliver, you’ve done a great job with the prompt this week. Your story is very descriptive and you have used some good vocabulary. Keep up the great writing.
    Ms Brennock
    Team 100wc

  3. andrew paterson says:

    Hello Oliver,
    Your tales was truly creepy and it was pleasure reading it. Use of commas and avoiding the same word more than once in a sentence would make it easier for the reader to understand. Nevertheless, a great story that was a joy to read.
    Andrew . USA

    • Oliver M says:

      Dear Andrew,
      Thank you for your comment. it one of the first comments I have ever had. Your suggestions were really useful. My teacher is Miss Burke and she is very proud and said well done.
      From Ollie

  4. Mrs Addleton says:

    Oh my, Oli, a man who can switch in and out of stone-mode and jumps out at you would be a nasty surprise on a quiet walk in the woods! Thank goodness the man with superpowers caused the monster to be vaporised. Well done for thinking of brackets to insert your additional information – you could also use commas here. Well done for publishing your first blog and I will really look forward to seeing your next one.
    From Mrs Addleton

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