I don’t like my parents so I just robbed them!!!!
When I was younger they treated me like a baby until I was 19. I was so angry when I was 19 they and they both had augment disowned me and throw me out onto the streets and I lived on the street for about 2 seconds, because my mum felt bad.
So now I have my old PS2, XBOX360 and my 65 INCH TV!!!Ops now you probably know I am rich well my parents are anyway, so I am going to try and rob my best thing of all, my mums and dads rings and sell them. But where would I hide it all? I have found places to hide my PS2 and my XBOX360. but what about my 65 INCH TV!!!!!
A very amusing tale Harvey which was a pleasure to read despite a few spelling errors and repeated words. Keep up the good work. Well done from USA
I love the last line Harvey- real comedy line at the end!!
So just re-read sentence three and break it into separate sentences- there are too many ‘and’s in it. I also don’t know why you have two ‘they’??
I can’t wait to read next week’s blog!!
Harvey, the last sentence in your blog was like a punchline and brought a smile to my face as I imagined you trying to hide such as massive television in your own home. I think if you re-read your first paragraph you will agree there are some errors that you could easily correct and make sure you remember that the past tense of ‘throw’ is ‘threw’.
I know that you have worked on your blog at home in your spare time this week and have enjoyed reading and critiquing some of the other childrens pieces. I’m looking forward to seeing your next 100wc entry.
From Mrs Addleton
OK I will remember that.
Wow Harvey. You need to find somewhere fast! Good luck!