I am a secret robber and no-one knows and today was one off the creepiest day of my life. To be fair my mom is NOT agreeing on my robbery, but my Dad does so I went to the BANK and got some Gold. I had like 100 police on me so everyone had to RUN for there lives. I went to do a robbery but I just found out that it was my mom and dads house. This brings back memories and I was in two minds ether I robbed it or just left it as it is. I had know clue what to do…..
I robbed it but where would we hide it all?
very good story kian your best friend josh mcknight
I really like your title Kuan and you drew me into your blog really well. Maybe your character could return the stolen things but keep all the gold!
thanks for those lovely comments
That was really good and I enjoyed it.
Kian,
You definately grabbed my attention by revealing that you are a secret robber in the start of your blog. I was also intrigued to know why this was the creepiest day of your life. I agree with William that it would not really make sense to steal and hide things from your own house; perhaps you were impatient to publish your first blog and did not double check/edit as thoroughly as you normally would.
I know that you have given up your break times this week to enter the 100wc! It was lovely to see your enthusiasm to share your blog with such a wide audience. I hope you get plenty of comments and enter another one soon.
From Mrs Addleton.
Good work. I really enjoyed reading your blog No-one Knows! I really like the way that you put some capitals letters in to emphasise what you mean to all the thousands of people that are reading your blog. I really wondered how you just got that much out of the bank. I think you have used “there” instead of their and “know” instead of no. I really wonder why you would rob and hide your own stuff.
I do not think MY Mum would allow me to just go and rob a bank and my dad would not let me rob either!
I hope you do another WC next week.
William